"Perfect Sonnet"
The Golden sun us setting in the west
Finally home at the end of the day
All they are doing is trying their best
Sitting and wishing that things go their way
Piles of dead trees sitting on their shelves
Wake up, go to school, go home, and go eat
Pounds of stress on the minds of themselves
Do homework, go to sleep, and then repeat
This schedule has been ingrained in their brains
Spinning in circles not sure what to do
Their minds have been poisoned by all of these stains
Hoping that no one ends up like this too
We look outside to the sun shining bright
Hoping today is better than last night
Broken Sonnet
Magazines are laid out in front of her
In front of the mirror she says to herself
"If I try harder I'll be her for sure"
Taping pictures of models to her shelf
Using these pictures she starts to slow down
Her parents think that this idea is strange
Hopes that one day she'll be given the crown
Her young body is beginning to change
Her bones show in all the wrong places
The plates are getting emptier and emptier
Looks like she has completely changed faces
The things that she sees start to get fuzzy
Things are getting thinner
Explication for Broken Sonnet
My broken sonnet is about the dangers and realities faced when people have anorexia. It tells a story of a girl going through a tough time mentally and how she is self conscious with her body. She turns to magazines to look at all of the models as her inspiration and the idea that she needs to be perfect slowly gets to her. This causes her to go into a state of anorexia, ruining her life. Although this poem is by a girl, is also affects many men around the world. The turn of my poem is after line 8. The turn goes from the girl starting to form the disease to her completely changed by it, a drastic change. The two rules that I changed were the rhyme scheme breaking about a little over halfway through the poem and the poem ends a line and a half too early. The meaning behind the broken rhyme scheme is showing the deterioration of the girl's body because of anorexia. The deterioration of the poem translates to her body deteriorating from the harmful disease. The reason for the poem to end early is to show her life ending early. Anorexia is deadly, as well as many other eating disorders such as bulimia and EDNOS. Anorexia can kill people at a very young age so I feel like I cut the poem short to show the seriousness of her life and how the subject of the story (anorexia and how harmful it is) can be deadly and can cause people's lives to be cut short.
